2007年10月31日 星期三
Betrayal
Tonight I stayed in my room and read a diary which my friend wrote on his blog. After reading, I felt sad and realize his misery. In the article he mentioned that he had ever betrayed by his girlfriend. He always had trusted his girlfriend and concentrated on their affection. However, she was cheating on him and fallen in love with another boy. Her betrayal was a great blow to him; therefore, he couldn't believe any girls anymore. He began to have no confidence on everything especially love, and has been single for four years. In fact, he was handsome and considerate. He had a lot of wooers but he couldn't accept affection of other girls. I hoped that he would become optimistic and find his true love one day.
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"he had ever betrayed by his girlfriend." I've mentioned this usage of "ever" many times in comments in this class. It's not idiomatic English. This clause should be "he had been betrayed by his girlfriend."
"and fallen in love" ==> "and had fallen in love".
"no confidence on everything especially love,"
==> "no confidence about everything, especially love,". As the old saying goes, "no pain, no gain". Love is a risk,just as is every other meaningful activity. You should tell your miserable friend that he ought to stop feeling sorry for himself. Four years is more than enough to mourn his loss. Only his self-pity and fear of being hurt again are keeping him from having another girlfriend. Life is full of betrayals, but we can't, like turtles and snails, protect ourselves by hiding in our emotional shells for years. That's cowardly, in my humble opinion. If someone -- friend, lover, family member -- betrays you, you have to learn a lesson from it, not go hide your head in the sand and hope you can keep yourself from being hurt again. That doesn't solve the problems of betrayal and failing to understand the people around you.
"I hoped that he would become optimistic and find his true love one day." Conflict in your verb tenses here. What this says -- but I doubt that you meant it to -- is that for the brief moment after you read his blog and felt his pain, you hoped good things for him, but now you no longer do.
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